Wow, congrats on an awesome comic. Your colours are good, your photos are good and your story is interesting. I especially enjoyed the smoothness of your narration, or coherent sequencing of events. You guys really incorporated the narrative structure in terms of equilibrium, disruption and restoration of secondary equilibrium very well. I must honestly say it makes a good difference in terms of the strength of the narrative. In terms of Proppian characters I had a little difficulty. For example I assume that the counselling centre is the hero and the girl who had a blurry moment is a victim. I think you should have characterised your characters some more in order to draw a clearer distinction between your character roles. Nonetheless, great stuff!
Ok guys, I think in terms of Proppian characters you really outdid yourself's because I could see that the villain was the alcohol because it was ruining people's lives and I like the fact that you did not make the villain a person just to show that the characters don't have to be animate all the time. I like the way the hero (which I think is the girl) recognises the disruption and go to seek help and also how the counselling centre is the donor. Great staff guys but I really do think that you could have done better.
I had to go through this comic twice to understand what it is about. Maybe it is just me, but I felt the story jumped too fast.
By this I mean that there was no establishment of an innitial situation, a sence of normalcy that would have allowed me to bond with the characters and to recognise a disruption when it happens. Yes, there was a beginning, but it did not adequately introduce the different character functions. For instance, the fact that the girl in the beginning is the outcast leads me to recognise her as the princess, the victim who needs saving, however,by the end of the story she is somehow the hero. This is too much of a jump far too quickly.
Also, one is not certain if the villain is the alcohol or the friends, because (I assume) it is one of the friends that gives her the pills to drink, thereby tilting the equilibruim. Perhaps a bit of clarification on the villainy would have helped.
Because there was no clear establishment of an initial situation, it is very hard to recognise the villainy when it happens and the work of the hero is not easly understood because one does not know what she is trying to restore.
The story that you guys have told is truth for a lot of people who go through first year, perhaps better structuring of the narrative would have worked better.
Hey guys. Wow! The photos and graphics which you used in your comic made it really effective and eye-catching. The best thing about your comic was the (semi) happy ending and the fact that your hero was strong enough to overcome the villain of peer pressure and at the same time to convince the villain herself to go to counselling and get help. Its so important to make it known that its not ´uncool´ to go to counselling and in making your hero someone who had been easy influenced before made it an effective way of portraying the strength which can be easily obtained by even the biggest nerd. Congratulations guys! We did a similar comic on our blog go check it out! http://www.my1stime.blogspot.com/
I think your comic strip was wonderfully satirical and whimsical yet it conveyed its real meaning clearly. The villain was dressed like a wicked witch which is very Proppian and the dialogue fitted her evil character. Your protagonist/heroine was what a heroine should be. She was sweet yet wise and managed to come out unscathed because she “conquered” evil. The aid was the counselling centre which helped the heroine along the right path i.e. not drinking and jumping into bed with strangers. The overall conclusion fitted with the heroine also helping the villains- it added a fresh twist to the tale. The pictures were taken well and seemed very well-planned. The choice of graphics and colours added to the “fairytale” feel and caught the eye of the reader. A fantastic comic for such budding journalists!
First year at university is as confusing as any message in a fortune cookie. Your not quite sure whether its good or bad news, your not too sure about how it applies to your life, its open to many individual interpretations and essentially it is rather enlightening. However, first year is not covered in a delicious pastry and its easy to get a little despondant about that.
First year is chaotic, scary and awesome - all rolled into one. Adapting is tough, and it helps to have a few older, wiser friends to show you around while you try to keep up with the frisky pace.
We at 5 in Blindsight didn't have friends like that (maybe because we're all so good looking and that intimidates people... But probably not), and it spurred us on to create this blog - to try and help prospective first years. O.K, maybe it wasn't that altruistic - this blog is part of our Journalism and Media Studies course. But still, we are all first years, and we would like to share our experiences with you, and hopefully in doing so, give you a little perspective to ensure that you aren't entirely as blind/ wildly awkward/ lost as we were when you arrive at varsity.
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Wow, congrats on an awesome comic. Your colours are good, your photos are good and your story is interesting. I especially enjoyed the smoothness of your narration, or coherent sequencing of events. You guys really incorporated the narrative structure in terms of equilibrium, disruption and restoration of secondary equilibrium very well. I must honestly say it makes a good difference in terms of the strength of the narrative. In terms of Proppian characters I had a little difficulty. For example I assume that the counselling centre is the hero and the girl who had a blurry moment is a victim. I think you should have characterised your characters some more in order to draw a clearer distinction between your character roles. Nonetheless, great stuff!
Quinn
www.pointingpurple.blogspot.com
Ok guys, I think in terms of Proppian characters you really outdid yourself's because I could see that the villain was the alcohol because it was ruining people's lives and I like the fact that you did not make the villain a person just to show that the characters don't have to be animate all the time. I like the way the hero (which I think is the girl) recognises the disruption and go to seek help and also how the counselling centre is the donor. Great staff guys but I really do think that you could have done better.
Ntombi
I had to go through this comic twice to understand what it is about. Maybe it is just me, but I felt the story jumped too fast.
By this I mean that there was no establishment of an innitial situation, a sence of normalcy that would have allowed me to bond with the characters and to recognise a disruption when it happens.
Yes, there was a beginning, but it did not adequately introduce the different character functions. For instance, the fact that the girl in the beginning is the outcast leads me to recognise her as the princess, the victim who needs saving, however,by the end of the story she is somehow the hero. This is too much of a jump far too quickly.
Also, one is not certain if the villain is the alcohol or the friends, because (I assume) it is one of the friends that gives her the pills to drink, thereby tilting the equilibruim. Perhaps a bit of clarification on the villainy would have helped.
Because there was no clear establishment of an initial situation, it is very hard to recognise the villainy when it happens and the work of the hero is not easly understood because one does not know what she is trying to restore.
The story that you guys have told is truth for a lot of people who go through first year, perhaps better structuring of the narrative would have worked better.
Hey guys. Wow! The photos and graphics which you used in your comic made it really effective and eye-catching. The best thing about your comic was the (semi) happy ending and the fact that your hero was strong enough to overcome the villain of peer pressure and at the same time to convince the villain herself to go to counselling and get help. Its so important to make it known that its not ´uncool´ to go to counselling and in making your hero someone who had been easy influenced before made it an effective way of portraying the strength which can be easily obtained by even the biggest nerd. Congratulations guys! We did a similar comic on our blog go check it out! http://www.my1stime.blogspot.com/
I think your comic strip was wonderfully satirical and whimsical yet it conveyed its real meaning clearly. The villain was dressed like a wicked witch which is very Proppian and the dialogue fitted her evil character. Your protagonist/heroine was what a heroine should be. She was sweet yet wise and managed to come out unscathed because she “conquered” evil. The aid was the counselling centre which helped the heroine along the right path i.e. not drinking and jumping into bed with strangers. The overall conclusion fitted with the heroine also helping the villains- it added a fresh twist to the tale. The pictures were taken well and seemed very well-planned. The choice of graphics and colours added to the “fairytale” feel and caught the eye of the reader. A fantastic comic for such budding journalists!
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